Do you like this?

[flaite1]

I need some critics coming from objective people and also some advices, haven't finished the song but i need to know if i need to improve something before i continue.
also:

Do i sound like a Br?
if i do, is it like:
hahahaha he sounds like crap
or just something u can notice but doesn't really matters fundamentaly.

Need critics
-like it? great
didnt? please tell me why
just some little verses here in the vid:
YouTube - Piero - justin fag
If someone wants to participate in it sayin stuffs like ***** so it sounds meanest msg me xD

 

[Shiimi]

You don't have the voice to be a rapper... If you need some inspiration then listen to this. YouTube - Rusko Cockney Thug

 

[Beo]

Who makes your instrumentals?

 

[flaite1]

i do fl studio

 

[TheNotoriousNaS]

*) You voice needs to be louder

*) Work on your accent, nearly impossible to really understand what you say (not counting obvious words such as faggot, bitch etc.)

*) Please, please don't do a diss song. At least not towards someone you don't have a beef with personally

*) Did I say louder?

*) Use more advanced words. Look for Immortal Technique, Eminem and Mobb Deep lyrics

*) Include lyrics in your video description

*) You sound Russian

*) Don't do that laugh

I think that's about all.

 

[troja]

I don't like it, rap sucks :/

 

[flaite1]

*) You voice needs to be louder

*) Work on your accent, nearly impossible to really understand what you say (not counting obvious words such as faggot, bitch etc.)

*) Please, please don't do a diss song. At least not towards someone you don't have a beef with personally

*) Did I say louder?

*) Use more advanced words. Look for Immortal Technique, Eminem and Mobb Deep lyrics

*) Include lyrics in your video description

*) You sound Russian

*) Don't do that laugh

I think that's about all.

kinda rough but thx bro needed that, heres a rap i did in spanish
check it...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MBEfrV1E_so