its doesnt seem smooth enough it also lacks a bit personallity seems a bit too dull.
for example the last sentence would sound much better if you just changed it a bit:
I managed to escape along with a small group (you could also change this to something like: along with a couple of my fellow guards) , leaving the prisoners behind to rot in there cells.
I'm not saying its bad or anything, its really decent but i just didnt really felt it.
Cheers,
Hehemidu
I will tell Dark about it, maybe it is just the schema and he was thinking about improving it later. Thank's for the support
PD: Yellowhat has left the project
Alush has joined as mapper
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